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Teen Angst Poetry is WAY too prolific on the net...so here's more... [Aug. 28th, 2003|03:11 pm]
Miss Von Trapp
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Autumn days come
and the long grass is jeweled.
Summer days have gone.


This was my very first published poem. I was about 8/9 years old (and had just learnt about haiku form) and won a competition to have it printed in a school childrens poetry anthology...unfortunately, my mother never bought a copy of the book when it was available...and I have no recollection of it's title...the only memory I have is seeing the book and my printed poem in the secretary's office at the time.

Another one I won a competition with when I was little was a rubbish "Never Go with Strangers" poem...it was a regional police competition...and I had the poem printed, framed and displayed in their Exeter headquarters...a copy in a folder for myself (which I have in a box...somewhere), and a Curly Wurly...which I am sure were bigger in those days, and didn't survive past lunchtime. Yum!

I wrote a ton of poetry between the ages of 6 and 18/19...it went from childish comedy stuff which was mostly rhymed and metered...to the regular teen angst and 'philosophical' musings...

I don't write anything these days...I enjoy prose more, and have an innate dislike of teenage poetry especially on the web...unless I consider it intelligently written, and not cliche rubbish. I hate having to wade through tons and tons of the stuff everytime I have to look at a new goth website. I see 'My Dark Musings' and inwardly groan:/

eg. "the blood wells and drips from my knife-rent wound as the hatred and woe pours from me into the eternal ocean of lies..."

That kind of crap lol. I'd rather read Byron...

In fact, out of all my 'teen-angst' years...there are only two poems of mine that I actually really like, and I'm going to subject you to them here simply because this is MY DIARY and I CAN!!! Bwahahahahaha!!!

I actually wrote this vampire goth cliche of a poem in 1996. It's a bit crap (not dissimilar to children's poetry by Robert Louis Stevenson) but I like the rhythm of it;)

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Sepulchre (1996)

Candle burning in the night,
Touching me with ochre light.
Melting wax that dribbles down,
Crimson on my bone-white gown.
Dancing flame that chases dark,
Warmth and comfort to my heart.

I should never lie awake,
Through midnight hours my sojourns take;
Do my dreaming by the day,
Sleeping sunlit hours away.
But daytime light I can't abide;
The night is where I'm doomed to hide.

I, a vampire, forced to feed
On nought but blood - my only need.
My only light; the candle there
That burns in my sepulchral lair.


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...ok, last one. I won't subject you to any more of this un-literary torture;)

Older than the last...

River Dream (1993)

Woman in white
Stands silently on the other side of the water.
Come across, she says.
But you don't dare to leap and trust the river.

In the wake
A thousand eyes watch you.
A conscience says to wait.
But it will cost you.

Will you take a chance
and brave the leap?
The gap is not as far as you'd believe.
Our lives are a dream,
The world as a stream flows steadily on.

Woman in white
waits patiently for you to come and guide her homeward.
No time, she says.
Yet you hesitate and watch the river flowing.

In the wake
A thousand mouths urge you.
Their voices say to leap
They are there to help you.

Will you take a chance
and brave the leap?
The gap is not as far as you'd believe.
Our lives are a dream,
The world as a stream flows steadily on.

Woman in white
Meets Man in Black and cries for you to save her.
Jump now, she begs.
But still you do not trust the river.

In the wake
A thousand souls desert you.
You had your chance
Now life is taken from you.

Will you take a chance
and brave the leap?
The gap is not as far as you'd believe.
Our lives are a dream,
The world as a stream flows steadily on.


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Some random haiku nonsense which amused me...



Am I seriously this dull and sleep/work obsessed??

*fear*

LiveJournal Haiku!
Your name:vampgirl
Your haiku:on tv this morning
had curry pasty and beans
mudkip i choose you
Username:
Created by Grahame


LiveJournal Haiku!
Your name:vampgirl
Your haiku:my oh...i oh what
a night didn't go to sleep at
all after work...on
Username:
Created by Grahame


LiveJournal Haiku!
Your name:vampgirl
Your haiku:is so funny i
had stuff to do today but
i slept right they let
Username:
Created by Grahame


LiveJournal Haiku!
Your name:vampgirl
Your haiku:circle i to fear
o.o i've just woken from such
awful nightmares that
Username:
Created by Grahame


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[User Picture]From: vimster
2003-08-28 08:16 am (UTC)
I'm right with you on the net/goth poetry thing 100%.

I used to get these disc magazines on the Amiga in the iearly-to-mid 90s. One in particular would include any old toss it was sent, and consequently had acres and acres of the most cliched, overblown, pretentious toss imaginable. Ever since I've been wary of poetry, which is sad because when poetry is done well, it really does touch you.

It's all the bad goth poetry that really puts me off the genre. Fair enough, it's a means of expression, but it devalues the currency, putting pages and pages of it on the web. I strongly believe that there is room for a good goth poetry site, if it doesn't already exist, with the words "when we say good quality, we mean it" on the front page, if only to prove to the doubters that it's not some ghetto for dark, brooding teenagers.

I have to say, the first poem about the vampire was eminently readable, mainly because of it's understated tone. It leaves room for the imagination to breathe.

My personal favourite isn't very goth, it has to be said. It's John Hegley, glasses-wearer extrodinaire. He has this little world of glasses, dogs, trains, etc. Most are humourous, but he also writes about his often strained relationship with his abusive father. I was told he'll only sign books for people who wear glasses - top bloke.
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[User Picture]From: missvontrapp
2003-08-28 08:24 am (UTC)
John Hegley is great!!
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[User Picture]From: vimster
2003-08-28 08:50 am (UTC)
... and yes, Curly Wurly's were bigger, although it could be said we had smaller hands. Just try putting one in the fridge for 24 hours, you could do someone an injury with it, should you desire to do so.
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From: wildgift93
2003-08-28 09:17 am (UTC)

Depressed and Miserable

Yeah, and have you noticed that the 'current mood' thingy is ALWAYS on suicidal. I've been tempted to respond to one of them and post the number for The Samaritans. Do you think that Goth makes people depressed and miserable. Or is that depressed miserable people become Goth because it gives them a 'safe' place to be depressed and miserable. Oh, and there's nothing better than a miserable depressed person to lift your spirits when you are feeling depressed and miserable.

Current Mood: Depressed and Miserable
Listening to: Some miserable Joy Division song about depression.
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[User Picture]From: missvontrapp
2003-08-28 09:44 am (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

I don't think goth makes people depressed and miserable.

I don't think they even ARE depressed and miserable.

I just think that they think depressed and miserable is cool.

Which it isn't.

Cliche Morons!!

*grin*
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From: wildgift93
2003-08-28 11:14 am (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

I know, some people take it too seriously and quite literally. There is an element of humor in it too which I find quite amusing....just like my SARCASTIC response to this entry of yours...:)
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[User Picture]From: missvontrapp
2003-08-28 11:18 am (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

I got that!!

*grin*
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[User Picture]From: vimster
2003-08-28 10:23 am (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

It's certainly not about misery. Misery and black go together nicely though, think of funerals. Perhaps this is where it all gets mixed up.

For me it's the atmosphere and emotion (some may call it histrionics), it's dark, rich, exotic, erotic and romantic, yes with some melancholy too. Vapires embody all this, and you'd hardly describe them as manic-depressive.

Joy Division were never self-consciously goth anyway, it was a reflection of post-industrial Manchester in the late 70s, if I may be so Radio 4. People just seem to latch onto it, rather conceitedly drawing parallels with Ian Curtis.

Everyone has a bit of goth in them, some more than others, quite clearly (casts gaze).
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[User Picture]From: missvontrapp
2003-08-28 10:35 am (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

*looks around*

Well said, that man!!

*clap clap*
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From: wildgift93
2003-08-28 11:09 am (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

I'm way to depressed and miserable to carry on an intellectual debate about Goth, misery, and what Joy Division were REALLY about.
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[User Picture]From: missvontrapp
2003-08-28 11:24 am (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

*snip*
They chose the new name from a harrowing account of life in a concentration camp during World War 2. This book, The House Of Dolls by Karol Cetinsky, is quoted by Ian in a spoken insert to the song No Love Lost. The Joy Division was the corps of young women kept in the camp for the pleasure of Nazi officers on leave.
*snip*

from here: http://members.aol.com/lwtua/joydiv.htm

I knew this, but it's easier to find a quote online lol!
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[User Picture]From: vimster
2003-08-28 12:19 pm (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

[apologies if I'm replying far too much these days, try to stop stimulating my mind]

Strangely I learned about the origins of the Nazi Joy Division at school. Mrs Davies, my english teacher, seemed to know all about that, as well as the related New Order, another Nazi doing. Even more strangely you wouldn't have guessed she had this grip on popular music culture, seeing as she was in her late-50s, and had a bad leg, so if you had to follow her up the stairs, it literally took five minutes to do a 20 second walk.
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[User Picture]From: missvontrapp
2003-08-28 12:22 pm (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

*sprays coffee*

You fiend! You did it again!!!

Yeah, yeah, I read the disclaimer...
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From: wildgift93
2003-08-28 12:28 pm (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

Now, that is depressing!
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[User Picture]From: etceterate
2003-08-28 03:54 pm (UTC)

Re: Depressed and Miserable

Joy Division probably weren't self-consciously goth because goth as a musical genre hadn't really been invented, so I suppose you could call them retrospectively goth. Same with Bauhaus - they didn't set out to be a goth band, but had gothness thrust upon them. Chances are if both had come along once the goth subculture was up and running they would both have been labelled as such from the start.
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[User Picture]From: docudrama
2003-08-28 06:03 pm (UTC)
Oh, online goth poetry... I never read that shit. Does anyone? It's just another sort of pity-party, only it rhymes (most of the time). Boring, inane, and only saddening in that someone could really write that badly. Not everyone can be a poet, like every dress can't be a versace. ;D

But gosh I love *good* poemtry. ^_^
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[User Picture]From: missvontrapp
2003-08-29 07:31 am (UTC)
Hurrah!!

*wishes every dress could be a versace*

Trigger for my rant : I have a poetry section in my website forum unfortunately...(I have to cater for the visitors:/) and, like my role-play section (always bloody QOTD) I very rarely venture in there to moderate lol!

I like, maybe 2 poems in there out of about 800-odd I swear!! And those were haikus posted by a writer for gawd's sake lololol!!
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